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i watched her

blue eyes smile brightly
twinkling heavens in your soul as you look.

a smile breaching away
touching me deeply inside
red passion being born in my loneliness.

long arms, long fingers
long nails gently touch my mind
scratching away this pain, maybe i'll disappear
a million or two miles still away, too far to feel real.

she's starting to change, i'm now afraid
taller, thinner and more extreme
she screams at night, loud
dreams or something else.

she's changed her lipstick from passion red
a black now feeding the pain,
stained memories.

her fingers lay softly on a scarred arm, black nails
stained nails mimic ruined memories.

where has she gone?
©2001-2009 `sanguru
:iconsanguru:

Author's Comments

you said i cried today
if only you could see the tears
the pain as i grows deep inside me
i still fight the release for screaming is my tongue.

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:iconnieman:
I'm sorry.. for so much. I don't know what to say, I don't know what's wrong with me, I just gotta think for a while, of course, I probably think the wrong things about this poem right now, I'm not really thinking straight...

I love you, and I'll get back to you on this, just wanted you to know I read it..
:iconx0id:
very touching.. should get DP imho. Good work and very emotional.

Love it san

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:iconchosenone-:
Damn straight forward poem... awsome work. I love the imagery and overall effect.. hits the reader, hard.

Good luck to you, no matter where the road leads, let it always be one that shines.

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:iconsomnambulist:
Man.. Something I like about this poem, maybe because it's so dark and desolate. It's like "she" is actually still there, though she doesn't seem to be after her misery and transformation. Seems like it could be about different things, though I have a strong guess about what you intended for it to be about. Anyways, nice job on this work. :) (Smile)

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Poo It happens, blame the Kitty-chan
:icondoomit:
It's describes the darkening of the soul that depression brings. It is quite a graphic representation aswell. I like how the lipstick is a metaphor for the overtaking of love into pain. Very visual. I absolutely love it. very well put together. I hope your heart heals San. You deserve it.

-doomit

:iconchymera:
This is a deep viewing on an emotional scale. the imagery is vivid and concise, you can almost see the reds and the fingernails. The depression brings things back to heart which i wish never happened to me... getting through them was hard, but now makes life a little bit more enjoyable now that its over. great poem, has my vote for DP, best of the rough 34 ive peeked at at random today.

Watch which toes you step on today, they might belong to the foot that kicks your arse tommorrow
:iconmattspire:
reminds me a bit of a poem i wrote some time ago called 'sylph of the window' .. this, however, is more dark in its outlook.. and i suppose thats why i resentfully like it. i seem to like things that are dark and hopeless.

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It is not my desire to stray from the herd. It is my passion and purpose to set the pastures ablaze.
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:iconfaithwalker:
Truly a tremendous poem!!

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Faithwalker


:iconlilangelicdevil:
o wow...powerful
very nice

~lilangelicdevil

The people of the world...
Simple minds..simple pleasures.

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